Angel Wings

protect me... Kill me... Leave me... Angel Wings....

Stripped of his wings
the angel cries out
the scars that bleed
the blood so pure
the feathers of wings
fall one by one
Angel Wings
have lost their hope
have lost their grace
as they fall below
Angel Wings
what was the crime?
Why did my angel have to suffer such demise
I only asked him to love me back
was it so cruel
to ask him that
Angel Wings
I know you've lost hope
I'm sure you'll come back and make him whole
Angel Wings
I pray to the Lord
please do come home

Author's Note

please mind the spelling and Grammar problems.
what did you think of the story behind the poem? and what can I do to make it better?

Reviews

[Searching 4 Serenity]

Do not change a thing. Reading this, one can feel that it was from your heart. The story behind this made me think of a few things.

[Stripes]

The vagueness of the poem could ruin it, but for this one, it is really amazing. It really intrigued me and left me wondering about the history of what happened. Great work, once again.

[Matthew Kult]

every poem is only as good as you want it to be. I think you should expand on the story, tell me more about the situation. Tell me more about "Love" between the two. Just some suggestions.

On its own merit. Good flow, although does get choppy. Course I get confused easily with freeforms. Might be my brain telling me there should be something that isn't really needed. Like killing people....no wait sorry. Went a little off there so I apologize.


Good read and interesting.. I look forward to reading any additions or changes you make to the poem.

[al25]

I think this is really deep. Great job,