The Defination of Human

what does it mean... when you tell me how to act

I'll laugh
I'll cry
I'll do what you say
but does it really matter
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you'll cry
you'll hate
you won't listen to a word I say
in in my heart,
in know that it doesn't really matter
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Loneliness comes
when you leave me alone
Anger pent up
at how useless I am
this is what I feel
but life goes on
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Love,
hate,
happiness
and sadness
these are the emotions that make us human
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but what do we call those
who wallow in their pity
what do we call those
that don't feel anything

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think? Should I change anything or explain somethings thoroughly. Review!!!!

Reviews

[manifesto]

This is so full of honesty, I can really relate!

[OceanTropic]

I liked how you shaped the poem. Like two sides to a story. Very creative I liked that.

The poem seems a bit rushed simply because the lines are very short, but I don't think it takes away from the poem. Kind of suits it actually.

I enjoyed the last stanza, mostly because it's an interesting thing to ponder.

I think those that feel nothing are those that have suffered so much, that their human bodies go on defence mode and numb the pain simply to save itself.

Nice write.

[mamabear]

This is so beautiful. You don't need to change a thing. Thanks for sharing, I look forward to reading more of your poems.

Take care

mamabear x

[Emunah June.]

I loved it. Absolutely loved it. And since you told me the secret, I cant TOTALLY hear Ed and Al's voices in this. You did excellent!

[YouoweYoupay]

You don't need to change anything. It was a very good thought provoking write. I don't understand people with no feelings either, even when I can be cold sometimes. Thanks for sharing.

-Wella.

[Aven]

this is -straight from the heart- poetry. written down in a simple expression, but with great emotion spreading it's wings behind the words, lifting the poem, making it soar. I love the innovative presentation and that you did not use too many words on explaining. :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

we are all such a complex pattern of reactions and compositions~ each one of us a unique puzzle even to ourselves~
your last stanza digs very deep~ indeed who are the ones who have been chosen by or have chosen apathy~ a question to ponder~
you've created a very engaging poem of self searching and questioning life itself~ well done~

there's some grammar mistakes. i feel like you should add something metaphoric in between each stanza to make it emotionally stronger. :) Great work!