Satsuriku no Tenshi

I wait... patiently but is it that you don't come

I wait patiently

every day of my life
why is it that you don't come
to take me away
satsuriku no tenshi
its been promised
that you would visit
when it was time for me to go
so why do you let me suffer
as I drown in my tears
satsuriku no tenshi
I wait for you always
I wish to see
before I sleep
never waking
for eternity
satsuriku no tenshi
will you please come and visit me

Author's Note

satsuriku no tenshi means Angel of Death.
Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[manifesto]

This is so sad but absolutely touching! Waiting for the Angel of Death, now that's something that everyone does. But, some people enjoy themselves while waiting, and others just let themselves wither away... It's that choice that makes us who we are. :)

it's "shi no tenshi" to be exact. Shi is the noun for die. ;)

It's fantastic. If i had no idea what the japanese meant, then this almost seems like a very light everyday kind of poem. The "angel of death" adds heavyness to the writing. Great work!

[Aven]

that is not a person I would let in lol... now that I know that, I realize how dark this poem really is...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

strong writing laced with potent feeling~ very good!

[nono]

I like it and I know what it means -_- really into the japanese stuff. haha lol I love it it's beautiful and I love how you used a different language to make your points. Amazing job!

[Coyote Poetry]

I would not be in a hurry to see the Angel of death. A powerful poem. It felt almost like a prayer. The flow and story was very good. A excellent poem.
Coyote