Cliffside

Friendship , can it last forever?

I see you at the edge of a cliff
As you ask me, as if.
You fell, you cry,
Knowing this can't be helped.
You see the light , you see yourself.
You see the reflection of tears ,
as you hear the sea.
Now you can't go back,
because you lack the will.
How can you regret me,
when now this thing we have is ill.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A emotional ride in the poem. I like how you create place and thoughts. Some edges and cliffs are one way roads. I liked how you led to the logical and sad ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

As you ask me, as if.... (As if what?, What's the emphasis here?)....This poem is full of emotion. What caused the fall and tears (the parting) that can't be resolved?

[Humberto Contreras]

I try to create a conversion between the to character, like one is asking questions why and the other just say as if, like how your in argument with a friend, and maybe I fail in creating that.

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

Ok, not that you failed in that; rather, it's I who fail to comprehend.