Night

We were night and day.

Always chasing after the other,

Never being able to catch up.

 

When we parted,

The world was drenched in

Eternal night.

 

Now I sit,

Blindly

Waiting for my sunshine.

Reviews

[KonxOmPax]

The previous reviewer took the words right out of my mouth "short and sweet". The first line reminded me of your other poem "Yin and Yang" and I know in my review to that poem I said I liked it but felt something missing at the end. In this case I think I feel the same thing but in this context it's more appropriate leaving me wonder and also the tone of pure resignation is captured well, no belaboring to get to the point just a few words.

[runaway smile_<3]

Short and sweet. I think it lacked a bit in descriptive words, but otherwise I liked it. Good job.