Francois Dillenger

I hate the description, poems describe themselves.

Up on the mantle, there's a picture of your shadow.
Touch him then touch me, use to be your trick on me.
I showered hard and thought the same,
Blacked out crying...they say I was screaming your name.
"I fear this could be addicting."
I use to hear her sing.

She was very correct, yet I was just a kid,

So while erect, my judgement was no better than s**t.

And the told me I was a boy.
As it figures, I was the toy.

Drop all rehearsals this s**t is real:
Zack...realize all these eyes, these lies could break you,
Make you and take you to places,
You despise or dream to steam there.
With no gaps, bridges, or really tall ceilings,
I will fix on my optical, and ride to the future.
My steed was my weakness, walking is better.

I still wish I had that sweater...

Author's Note

Feedback appreciated deeply.

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I've heard of the movie~ never saw it though~ so this review will be for the pure body of the poem~
there are numerous dark twists and turns that coil into the deeper shadow areas of life that give your poem a very intimate quality~which evokes a very human response from the reader as they are drawn inside the thoughts of the narrator who seems almost to be pulling his puzzle pieces apart trying to make sense of the often unpleasent effects of life which has colored each piece ~
the meatphorical strings are intricate and surreal in quality permitting reader to engage and draw personal conclusions with which to relate to the poem~
the surreal undertones are brought to balance beautifully with the very human last line which wraps the poetic around reality~

[heich]

nice one..

[Ruth]

Such metaphors!
This rocks!
The reader is left reeling from this, a strange and surreal theme, darkness abound1
Great work
xx

[The Water Queen]

I'm not really a poem person but i will try my best to give a good review.
You can feel the emotion of the writer as you read. The poem flows expertly. As selene says it does envoke human emotions from the reader. I love the ending.
Awesome poem!!

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

a great poem you have....i like the uniqueness of this, its like a signature poem of Zackery Alan Daley....this poem makes a difference to the other poem...a good difference, good job:)