Ripples In A Wave

Ever get that sinking feeling?

I’ve been stuck on the brink

But I’m closer to dead 

As I deepen my depths

I only sink in this debt 

Getting friendly with death

I’m in need of the rest 

Utter mental duress

Only due to the stress

Know I’m stuck in distress 

No there’s no more school

Cause I bounced the last cheque 

Count another regret

Might need to check me in

Where do I begin?

Stress engraved within the skin

With the patience drawing thin

Accounts defining slim

Can’t believe I let it slip

About had it with the s**t 

I can end it with a slit

& just leave my wrist split 

A gone with no goodbye

It’s getting harder to decide 

I made my own demise

Fabrications from the lies

No ambition in my eyes

But that’s never no surprise 

Committing sober suicide

Binge on watching my soul die 

& I’d do it all again

It made me hell bent

I’ve been hella bent 

A rage devil sent

Good is just scent & evil is a sense 

The voice’s making sense

When I’m on my last cents 

What’s the sense in innocence?

I’ve lost my inhibition 

Slowly losing all my vision

I’m tripping within the visual 

I’m just a lost individual 

Further from your typical 

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Juliespenhere often read requests me on good writing she finds. Normally I would find it a little hard to plow thru such a long poem about such a dark topic without having some spot(s) of hope (my preference). But your poem is done in a creative & imaginative way, so that I was paying attention to your wordplay, more than the dreariness of your message. I like the way you use homonyms mixed in with your rhymes, as well as other sound similarities & parallels (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Zhavy]

Thanks again for the sincere words. I agree, sometimes I'm afraid of shorter poems but that is the best things sometimes, just the essentials. Thank you for the reminder, and contributing to better creation

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

i read this again still love it
ive sent a read request to my mate barley girl.
hopefully she will love it too

[Zhavy]

Thank you so much love the support and kind words

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

not kind words i write the truth

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

brilliant rhyming and flow
im not an expert on poetry i just write ditties
but i love this one its so original and has a good feel to it
yes that sinking feeling iknow it well

[Zhavy]

The pen is the floatie of life

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

lol yes
its saved me a few times
i write when im down mainly
or just feeling sentimental
once i write it uplifts me usually