Strength In A Pen

This was one of the first things I wrote when I started in Grade 12

Sitting here smoking weed

Call this drug induced poetry 

All my life been trying to get the pretty girl to notice me 

Though I’ve been on my knees

Pleading woe is me 

Hasn’t done anything to put my soul at peace 

With the pen as my golden fleece

I have the might of Hercules 

And I tear my demons piece by piece

With every diss

To my lost family Rest In Peace 

To my enemies, Rest In Piss 

For all the times I reminisce

All the pain you brought to me 

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I am righteously blown away that this was your first poem in grade 12! You probably know I love a mean mono-rhyme & your uneven rhythm lends an interesting beat. Most who start out rhyming use the over-used common rhyming riffs, so I'm delighted to see your complex rhymes. It feels like it starts out a little slowly, but then your passion in the message seems to build & build, as you go (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Great Aunt Astri]

Well, I think it is typical of teenagers of that time! You were experimenting with rhyme (and assonance and alliteration) and you express the emotions of the young, whose love is not to be, very well. I had to smile at the last four lines ..... dare I say it ... my sentiments entirely!!!!!

[Verse]

And when I think of the pap I wrote when I was younger... never wrote any poetry in grade 12... :)

This is absolutely lovely, high-gloss storytelling and rhyme, with mythology, legend and ganja woven expertly in!! I have no personal experience with ganja, but that might be the difference between what most teens come up with, and this elegance.

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Wesley, this is a well-written poem that certainly gets your message across in rhyming format. It made me think of the old cliche, "The pen is mightier than the sword."

Very expressive and an enjoyable read. Keep writing! :-)