My Mamma Say

I had a dream�
That lady come
That my mama let her come
But she never come
She never come�

My mama say that lady no good�
That she would destroy me
That I would be killed
Even though I love her so
I love her so�

That lady�s like my sister�
We was so close
But mama tore us away
I miss her
I miss her�

Someday when I become big�
I see her again
We be best friends again
Mama can�t interfere no more
She can�t interfere no more�

I had a dream that lady come�
To take me away
To save me from this place
But she never came
She never came�

Someday she come.

Reviews

[Taja B.]

This is a very touching and heartwrenching poem. When I read this poem, I visualize little girls in dysfunctional homes being abused, desparate for a way out, searching for a better life. And when I visualize that image in my head, it saddens me that many children like you displayed in your poem grows up so fast due to their suffering. It makes me hope that they will have a better life soon. It really does.

Anyways, this is a good poem, and I liked your diction of this poem, making it sound more childlike ,effective for the overall message of this poem.

Thanks for sharing.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

aww baby, tears for you, :)

---mishy

[*** Hey Jude***]

With the purity of a child you have captured the desire for a childs need to have their mother. This is well written and touches the heart! ~ Jude xo

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Great write, sounds like one of the starving children of Africa waiting a visit from her sponsor or adopting parent. Very heart wrenching.

[Robert Luna]

Very interesting seemed to be coming from a child. Longing to have someone protect her in a way that no one else could ever like a sister or brother. I really think this an interesting piece and left enough for my imagination to play around with.


Well Done!!!!!

[The Musings of Mary H.]

Wow! I love this poem! You are so artful with words! Oh, goodness, you should tell me to calm down.

"My mama say that lady no good�
That she would destroy me
That I would be killed
Even though I love her so
I love her so� "

[Lia]

Really liked the way you wored the poem, child like. Thanks xx