poem battle #1

our most disputed poem.

K-When water's flowing up the hill,

   and trees start growing down,

   when busiest note time stands still,

   and proper girls take arm in gowns,

 

Z-This place you pen sounds fake,

   I do not think that it exists,

   all your brain cells are at stake,

   if your vice of drugs persists,

 

K-You asked for stanzas serious,

    for quatrains with some weight,

    returned I'm called delerious,

    will your whims be ever sake?

 

Z-I must've hit the answer spot on,

   Proof being how your defense caught on.

Author's Note

please leave a response to who you think won this poem.

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

we did because we get to read your word war*)
both have excellent points however I do like z's last comment about k's defense mechanism but z also seems to be a negative type because k can have whatever dreams k wants water flowing up hill-girls in gowns-these things can exist in k's world
so I am torn all I can figure is I win I get to read it and thank you for involving me the reader*)

[Zvs.K]

Z-well I'll admit to being a negative type in this poem but I couldn't resist :)

K-in your face, Z! Thanks, Holly! We might not have a winner between un yet, but I'm glad to hear you liked it!