Lifeless

I am lifeless

Such as a dry falling leaf

Dead from inside

Yet restless and rustling

In the wind

As to go far away

To separate itself from it's roots

And never to come back from where it once left.

 

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A meaningful poem of brevity. Creates a real feeling of isolation and exile. Sharp imagery. Nice work Parin.

Chris

[Abraham Patrick]

Nice imagery. Strong emotion conveyed by the lines "To separate itself from it's roots

And never to come back from where it once left."

[KeithMansfield]

Wonderful imagery in those words. An economy of words I can appreciate. Nicely done.

[xxfreak187xx]

Extremely well put. I read and felt it.

[Albertine Engelhardt]

Wow, that hit me.
Good poem you've made there!
I got no critique, cause I really loved it :-)