lonelines

just something i thought of, and how it relates to me

Sometimes I feel as the moon.

Surround buy stars.

Yet,

Those stars in reality.

Are so far away.

 

Loneliness.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

what do you think

Reviews

[Allie :)]

1:There are tons of spelling errors...I think you've broken a record for the most mistakes in only 1 stanza.
2: Your meaning is unclear, and extremely foggy.
3: There doesn't seem to be any emotion put into it.
You've just made the 3 biggest mistakese a poet can make in 1 stanza...congratulations...
Good...um...try...?

[MeGoRawrr]

This poem speaks to me in so many ways. It's only a few sentences long, but it says so much.
'buy' should be 'by'.

[aaron]

thanks allie for the criticism.
its refreshing. :)

[qaralynn]

good write!! love it :)

[Kaylor Mason]

Nice and direct--eloquent in its simplicity and spartan lines. Good work!

[Victoria Thornton]

Short, but gives the reader exactly what they need. Nice!

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