"Mistress L"

my greatest sin, my closet enemy...

She calls to me.

 

Her smell.

Like a rose.

 

Her skin,

As soft as the blue sky.

 

Her voice,

Like a sirens.

 

She asks for me when I’m with others.

She beacons me when I’m alone.

 

She tries to hold me.

But I deny.

 

I try to fight.

But find myself in her bed,

Once again.

 

It sickens me.

For when I wake,

She is there smiling.

Claiming I’m no saint.

 

I can’t look her in the eye,

When I see her with another.

 

I can’t look her in the eye and defy her.

 

So now I find myself running.

When she is at my door.

 

It is not cowardly fear,

But rather,

The only path she leaves me.

 

If I do fight,

I find myself with her the next morning.

 

What do I do...?

For she haunts me.

And will not let me be.

 

She is my sin,

 

My burden.

My nail on the cross.

She is,

My mistress.

Author's Note

long awaited edit.

Reviews

[MeGoRawrr]

Probably my favorite out of all your work. (:
"She is my sin, My nail on the cross." Beautiful phrase.

Your 'I's should be capitalized.

'Beacons' is spelled correctly, but I think you meant 'Beckons', which means to call forth.

"But finned myself in bed with her," 'Finned' should be 'Find'.

[Allie :)]

Alright, lets see...
You need to check your capitalization, of course, and re-check your grammer.
But I like this one better,
your ideas are better defined, and you get to the point that you want to get to faster...
not great, and could definetly use work, but not bad :)