just a pour in rhyme

just a pour in rhyme

well, these from within, as those without a shelter...
word bombard a basement,well as without a filter
but to sense me beyond the very writes of hand
you must rid of your shields, and your thoughts disband

travel through history, and a few tweaks in time
to find solitude, in a simple chime

welcome to sanity, in worlds of seas,
that by every breath comes another,
of a gentle breeze

live the storms that lead a pen
o, how i wish its mine,
but too shallow are my words
for heaven to find

by;
The Black Iris, Of The Luminous Imperious

Reviews

[Robert]

not your best iv read, i like the feel of the poem but its very loose and not in focus. the words you choose are always good but i donno it just seems that you dont really have a visual, or a center to write around. i know you have better in ya, and ill eagerly await another poem from you

[A.r. Bazian]

Goodness, Thank you Robert for your review. It isn't... I agree
Goodness it has been ages since Writerscafe...