The Remnants of Tomorrow

We are the progeny of infamy

Reared in the age of insolence;

We are products of emptiness;

The hollows killing resonance.

 

We are robbers of the poor

And feeders of the obese.

We are the doctors of the healthy

And enemies of the diseased.

 

We are protectors of falsehood

And persecutors of the righteous.

We are the vanguard of injustice,

The advertisers of the audacious.

 

We are the pursuers of reason

And the destroyers of logic.

We are materialistic romantics,

Searching for monetary magic.

 

We are right when we are wrong,

And wrong when we are right.

We are harbingers of doom

And preachers by daylight.

 

We are the mistakes of a generation,

The addled and the confused.

We are a generation of mistakes,

The battered and the bruised.

 

We are the remnants of tomorrow

Tearing at the fabric of today;

As we hope for droplets of time

To wash our disgrace away.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Very interesting,intelligent and powerful words.In the first few lines i like how well you have captured the empty feeling...as in the lines,
We are products of emptiness;

The hollows killing resonance.
'hollows killing resonance' is a nice phrase,it can be thought of in different ways.I would like to understand your thought behind it ?..
Another two lines which stimulated my thinking were
We are the pursuers of reason

And the destroyers of logic.
How different are reason and logic..perhaps logic is spontaneous and reason is practiced,coerced,taught.
i feel the last two stanzas are brilliantly penned down.


We are the mistakes of a generation,

The addled and the confused.
You have thought a lot about this cause what you have penned down here is a thought which can only come with a thinking which is deep,honest and yet precise.Mistakes of generations pile on us and some mistakes that were erred by our predecessors can not be undone by us...but yes all we can hope for:droplets of time to wash our disgrace away.
Brilliant.

[FlawedByDesign]

Awesome!!!

A crafty, smart and well thought out piece of literature, shining a light on the world as it is today, and has been for a while (though we won't admit it). You've put the inner workings of Abdul's mind into this piece and taught the world a lesson. You've left no stone unturned, touching on so many constructs of the life we live.

The whole poem could be quoted for it's brilliance, but the last stanza deseto be repeated,
"We are the remnants of tomorrow
Tearing at the fabric of today;
As we hope for droplets of time
To wash our disgrace away."

Very well done.

[alan peter kelly]

i have nothing more to add to the word YES other than to say that this is going in my favourites....

[Marie Harrison]

Brilliant! I loved it. So much truth in you entire poem. Fabulous write.

[Ruth]

Absolutely perfect!
We are all of this and more! Humanity has never been consistent! We have always been so much less than we can be or think we are so much more than we really are!

"We are the remnants of tomorrow
Tearing at the fabric of today;
As we hope for droplets of time
To wash our disgrace away."

Beautifully powerful lines! A lesson within a wonderfully designed poem!
Stunning!
xx

[Dinesh Sairam]

This first thought to hit me after reading this was "Apocalypse now", "The hollow men" and the scene where Marlon Brando recites the poem. I don't know if this was an inspiration.

Second thing I noticed was, you have (or tried to) used opposites in the last word in some places. I don't know if you missed that out in other places or this all opposite thing was unintended. But, I really liked the idea.

And yes, what you say is true -- We are the final trails of the grand show, the closing curtain, the withering leaves of the huge tree.

"We are the remnants of tomorrow
Tearing at the fabric of today"

I quoted this specifically because, it reminded me of a poem from Abdul Rahman's "Piththan" (Anthology). It's titled "Nigazh (i.e. Nigazh kaalam)". I'll rather translate it -

"The loon was standing on one foot -
I asked "Are you trying to dance?

He said - "I'm trying to step into present", "I can't".

"The kept my one foot on the past,
I took my other foot for the future
Where is present?"

"Watch as you speak - Past feasts on you
Letter by letter, word by word"

"Time is greatly misrepresented -
Present is just a false part of it"

...

Well, a different write from you. Good to see you write like this.

Keep writing.

[the_stoic]

the best part of your write was that you have let it flow naturally . though the lines rhyme nowhere it seems as if you have tried to do so ! the fact that has been brought out is quite relevant in today's context specially with all the unfortunate incidents going on in our country nowadays . it was nice to see you drift away a bit to use your poetic prowess for such writes . thanks for sharing