How It All Started

Do you have those times, when it's 2 am and you’re in bed trying to fall asleep but you just can’t get your mind off something that happened in your past, just following you and meeting you in the present? Like the time in kindergarten when me and Gabrielle were fighting over who gets to sit next to Abie at lunch. Or what about the time in first grade when I went up to Daniel and hugged him? But this time it’s bigger, when you have all your old best friends, who betrayed you's secrets, you’re in bed thinking of what to do, to make them regret ever calling you a s**t behind your back, or anything similar to that. Well I, Nicole Gregman know exactly how to handle b*****s. Let’s see what I’m up to this time.... hehe..... xxx. Nikki. <3 Mwah

Reviews

[Jersey]

Its short but grabs your attention from the moment you start to read. There are a few spots where an error sticks out, but that's an easy fix. Curious to see how it continues.

[Maurice]

This chapter does what a first chapter should do: it grabs the reader's attention and makes the reader want to read on. Good job.

[Sports Girl]

It needs to have a little more and there are a few errors and sentence fragments but other then that it was good

[Norma M Sutton]

Sort of felt like I was dumped in the middle of something. Not sure what to think about this start.

[KaySea]

nice.
someone needs to put those b*****s in their place, and show them hows boss.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

I thought this was a thriller novel or something..but by the end it sound more like comedy...(shaking my head in confusion :P)
Well, it's interesting...
I'll put in my reading list then n will read it when I had the time..
thanks for sharing :)

[PaperHearts]

This was a great first chapter! Despite it's shortness, I could already tell a lot about Nicole Gregman, and I think you did really well in setting the tone of the piece for future chapters. I liked your unique style of writing; it kind of reminded me of a blog! :) It's hard to tell whether Nikki is a character that I will grow to love or hate, but as this first chapter clearly shows, she seems like a girl with a strong personality, and I'm interested in what will become of her. :D
~PaperHearts

[V. Germanotta]

who betrayed you's secrets, your in bed thinking of what to do
Grammar, mija. your secrets. you're in bed
you're=you are
your= possession