CEASE TO EXIST

A free verse poetry

Respect, such an exquisite word

Unceasingly misapprehended

Respect, ought to be gained freely

Not through force

Not through cruelty

For such would lead to terror

 

Respect, ingrained since childhood

Unceasingly misapprehended

Respect, taught to be for everyone

Not just for ancients

But for youths as well

Does that still hold true?

Not just for the prosperous

But for the broke as well

Does that still hold true?

 

Respect, such an exquisite word

Without the essence

Without the power

Would cease to exist

Author's Note

Any advice? Don't judge though, I'm a beginner.

Reviews

[Robert Gluzman]

I really liked this, such a good theme and a purpose to concentrate on a single word which is very meaningful to human beings.
Something that caught my attention and appreciation is the rhythm you have here, for example: Repetition of words and similar construction of the sentences. Some comments however:

"Respect, ought to be gained freely" - I think you should specify this in the next line before saying "Not through force". In the next three verses you explain how it shouldn't be gained however it be nice if you tell more on how it should, for example:
´But, through choice
Actions that committed daily´

I also would like to add that I loved this:
"Not just for ancients
But for youths as well"- Love the metaphor for the elderly and the contrast made between the verses.

If I would have any other side comments it be that your poem is too short, however its not about the quantity of the poem but the quality. Your poem had good quality.

[potato]

I like this a lot. I like the way you focused on one word and really did it fantastically.