rage

rage that blinds rage that covers all i am in a film of red
rage rage for the way i was damaged and those who are dead
but who do i blame for this accursed affliction
do i listen to the ghosts benediction
he wants to temper my rage forge it for revenge
but how far will i go on this binge
once begun will i ever be able to bring an end
before my sword finds those who were once  friends
am i willing to let this rage destroy all that i am
or will i hid cowering from the storm like a lamb
will i fight to my last breath
for death seeks death
will i be less of a son
if this war is never begun
 

Author's Note

hamlet

Reviews

[GoodIntentiionz]

Really great, I'm gonna have to say rage is a really good word, not too generalized like "anger" and "mad", it has a little more personality to it. I like the emotion in the poem, I don't know if you meant to put it there (It's based off of Hamlet?), but I see it nonetheless. Great job.

[Kayla]

I liked it! And I liked that it is based off Hamlet. But I think that you should try to use the word "rage" a little less. Maybe use a synonym like anger.