The Sinking Ship

A first-person paragraph about a ship that mysteriously sinks with no warning. It sinks all by itself.

   I watched the ship sink into the lake. People screamed so loudly, I could hear it from miles away. Suspense, it was. Uh oh. Was this the other Titanic? There was no iceberg. This was a mysterious lake. I could swear I saw something green swirl round and round in the water. But what was really mysterious was the water burned, flames flying around. It was another adventure for me to have.

Author's Note

Sorry if it's just a paragraph, but that's how begginers start.

Reviews

[Dan Hiland]

It isn't even a paragraph- just a bunch of sentences masquerading as one. Were you planning on going somewhere with this?