Fire

Your presence caused my blood to boil,

and using that energy, we fueled a fire,

that inevitably simmered down to coals.

Reviews

[dan]

Adi, This is really a lovely piece, written with a lot of brevity. I personally believe that it is much harder than usual for a poet to communicate the message to the readers while using so few words.
Having said that, I believe that this details the ebbs and flows of a successful and loving relationship. It starts out with a sunburst of energy, the genesis of the love. That energy gets the fire cooking and it changes from a sudden novelty into a lasting and satisfying relationship...the simmering down to an air of contentment. VERY well done! take care...dan

[stargirl23]

Thank you so much! I personally like to write with fewer words so as to grab the reader's attention and make a point.