Boy and Girl

 

Boy and girl

Underneath the tree are a girl and a boy,

Inside their heart is love,

Between them is the wall of life,

Under them lay green grass,

Past ignoring love they now embrace it,

In their hands are each others,

Near them children awe and wish they where her,

Beside him she lets go of his hand,

After the children are gone they join hands again,

During the time when the children where there she feels embarrassed,

Except when children are there they hold hands and enjoy the company of one another,

For him everything is a piece of cake,

Without each other they are incomplete,

With each other they are the other piece of their life’s jigsaw puzzles,

Until they part, love is all they have for each other.

 

Author's Note

It was a school project, but I found myself loving it. :]

Reviews

[A]

This is very cute! I really like this poem! Very visual...well writen! :)

[Bryce Simonds]

School project eh? Not bad. Little grammar problems though which made it harder for me to get what you were saying.
"Near them children awe and wish they where her,"
The "where" there, should be "were".
"During the time when the children where there she feels embarrassed"
The "where" there also should be "were".
Other than those things, it was a nice little poem. Thanks for sharing.
-Bryce

[X_Emo_Princess_X]

It is really sweet. I love the emotion that you express through the girl's embarassment. It's a true human emotion that I think anyone would feel. I love that. It was amazing.

[lindsay]

aww i really think this. i actually just got emtionally, considering the poem of mine you just reviewed.
great write =]

[Starlingpoet]

That is a really good idea for a poem -my favorite line of the poem : Until they part, love is all they have for each other. Very nice way to end the poem- nice images.

[SeisaMystique]

This is very cute and child-like. Excellent imagery.

[Closed Account]

i know it's been a while since someone reviewed this, and i hope you don't mind me reviewing, but i really wanted to tell you that this is really good. i love it. great job!
--Bella Rose

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

this is a good poem...a wonderful job explaining love between that boy and girl
Great Job :)

[Luna]

I can see why you love it. It is so adorable and romantic.
It's simplicity is so lovely.
Great job!

-Luna

[Vitamin A]

This is adorable! So simple yet so lovely