It would have been a 'yes'

her first and last letter to him

Had you plucked up the courage to say hello

And ask for my number while I was passing the hallway,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you ‘accidentally’ brushed your shoulder against mine

And inquired if you could occupy the vacant seat beside me,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you left a note in my locker, signed with your name,

Hoping to have me as your date in the prom,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you confessed your secret on graduation day

And popped up the long-awaited question,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

Had you chased the bus in the pouring rain

And requested me to stay in town…with you,

 

It would have been a yes.

 

 

 

 

 

But you loved me with your eyes.

Only with your eyes…

 

 

 

Reviews

[Rossen]

This poem was talking to me. It said the chance of being rejected is a scary risk that sometimes
can bring home a dream come true to those dare to try. My eye's have gotten lost in too many
silent requests of the heart. I found this poetry to be from a poignant and lovable point of view.

Top shelf ArzelJoy (Blue),100/100



Rossen

[Kasey Miriam]

This is a poem I relate to very well. Words kept quiet freed one person and hurt another.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Had you left a note in my locker, signed with your name,
Hoping to have me as your date in the prom,
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Had you left a note in my locker, signed with your name,
Hoping to have me as your date for the prom,

I believe "for" instead of "in" sounds better...but just a minor detail there...
as with adolescent --- coming of age type of a write...I always went for it...
I'd rather know the answer...than never know at all...
most times its the insecurity of being told "No"...
and what part of that do you not understand...
but here you give the reader...or the admirer a chance to reel in the prize...(girl)
to come up with --- for lack of better words...action speaks louder than words...
you only come around once in life...like I said....rejection is not a bad thing...
only if you do not ask...and go forth with the courage to move forward...

[Bowers]

This is ... amazing, beyond amazing! It's like you've taken my thoughts, and wrote it down word for word... Exactly how I perceive it, the feelings I have, how do you do it? you have a talent, my dear friend, for creative, yet relatable works, and you never fail to impress me! The image you've chosen to correspond with the piece, is, in no other words- perfect. This is definitely one of my favorite piece on this site, you are an incredible writer.... Im always left greatly impressed when I read your works! :D

[Joe_VILOT_]

brilliant just brilliant,
wonder what thoughts went behind
(if I'm not reading it too deeply, he he =))
Also wondering if you'd like to read my stories
and if you have a chance enter one of your lovely poems
or a wonderful story into my competition

p:s sorry for the long remark (Top Marks)

[Cryingkate]

Fantastic ! I love the way you are taking on these subjects and doing it oh so well !

[gabrielle]

This piece just brought me back to memory lane. I learned early on that for unknown reasons some guys find us intimidating (i don't know if that's flattering or insulting). only those who have the courage to voice out what they feel deserve respect. Beautiful write, Blue.

[Blue]

I hope we are viewed in a flattering light, Ate Gab. :) Thank you for your lovely words.

[Anita Singh]

For me holding back ones desires is not love. Love is too passionate a thing to be held within. Even if the love is doomed. It is a thing to be rejoiced. Looking back and wondering "what would have been if I had.." is a terrible feeling.
Enjoyed reading your work.

[Blue]

Thanks for your insightful review, Annabella. And I'm afraid you are right about love being too passionate to be held within. Obviously, not many people know that. ;)