POV: Hers and His

a girl's sentiments and a boy's response

 

She:

 

 

A spell must have clouded your judgment of beauty,

mistaking a pebble for a diamond

or wits abandoned you

and I am but an error in your essay of experiences.

 

Pardon my quest for logic;

I am not accustomed to being

the subject of someone’s romantic interest.

 

 

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He:

 

 

You are dwarfed by your insecurities

and ill-defined by the mirrors of your demons.

 

Oh, how I’d love to lend you my eyes

that you may perceive your essence,  

intimately elaborated by the extent of my love.

Author's Note

This is what you get by watching romantic movies featuring a woman with poor esteem and a man proving her perceptions wrong. Contrary to what I've written, I'm not going to wait for a man to show me my worth.

Hmm... I should stick to the habit of watching tragedy-themed films.

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, this has for a a Donne/Marvell feeling put in another form..fine write.

[Blue]

I don't know them. Haha. Thanks a lot, Leslie!

[Saddam]

It is very new concept to bring both dialogue in one page. Very expensive and lovely idea.

Pardon my quest for logic;
I am not accustomed to being
the subject of someone’s romantic interest.

And response

Oh, how I’d love to lend you my eyes
that you may perceive your essence,
intimately elaborated by the extent my love.

Great.

[Blue]

Thank you so much, Ssadd! I love those stanzas, too.