This Rain

 

This rain,

Seeping through the cr a c ks of my heart,

Lingers…into permanence

 

Like my poem about brokenness

Of loving and losing,

Of feeling everything and nothing

All. At. Once--

 

The memories come and

Go

 

Like furious storms,

Sometimes curious drizzles

Of WHYs when you left me

Bro

 

Ken

Like your promises

To stay forever (a funny word)

 

 

 

And sometimes I laugh

Just to feel this rain all over again.

 

Reviews

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

The structure and how the content is written is good. Creatively done.

[Nusquam Esse]

What really stood out to me on this one was two things... First, I found your presentation to be fascinating: the way that spaces, line breaks, fonts, and punctuation are all used--clearly with intent and wit. Furthermore, this poem screams duplicity, with blatant and subtle contradictions and word-play laced throughout. I found it to be very interesting... but beyond that, I could sense the emotion behind this one. I especially loved your last stanza; it really sums up so well the contradictions in our actions and emotions... Glad to see that you are back in action.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very creative without losing the emotion; touch… the loss of a love one is never easy, especially when it is due to them earning their wings.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we laugh just to feel the rain....all over again..

I like that concept...and those curious drizzles...not enough to drive us away to safety...but we stick around just to see what will happen next.

[Lisa]

This was such an artistic piece. I loved every bit of it. Great job!

[Eddie Davis]

it is amazing how the words seem to flow like running water, dripping down. Very good use of word pictures, the split up 'Broken' was quite clever. I loved the last stanza -- pain can be purifying sometimes.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You tell in stark emotions the tale of loss and the waves of questions that remain swamping us when we lose someone we love Arzel

[Blue]

Thank you, John!