Süße Traüme

What a mess. "Süße Traüme ", German for Sweet Dreams.

As darkness descends upon my dreams,
images of you dance around brilliant coils of light

My memories of you reflect as through stained glass,
framing my heart in a chapel,
with a heavy, heavy cross to bear.

The colors that shine through
dance,
shattered and faint

They filter through
the murky haze of my half formed thoughts,
taking time to
fully awaken.

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I really liked your second stanza, especially the lines "framing my heart in a chapel, with a heavy, heavy cross to bear. " Those lines really show that the speaker longs for this person. The lines about the stained glass conveys the idea of division. The remainder of the stanza depicts a feeling of isolation, a feeling that the speaker bears a heavy burden alone. Possibly the strain of trying to remember details about this person as they fade from memory? Well done with this piece.

[Aidan]

Thank you for the kind words! I appreciate you taking the time to read and critique.