Empty

Where am I going?

Empty places

Distant faces

I am wake and I'm asleep

 

Close my eyes

Hold my breath

Make a wish

 

Running till I find a way

But I am drowning in an ocean

Waiting for the stars

Before the dark settles in

Reviews

[0_o Abbie]

I love the first stanza it's so awesome... "Empty places, Distant faces." I love it!

[Stripes]

This is a very simplistic and beautiful piece of work. The words carry over and flow very nicely. Great job.

[Robin]

the last two lines carry a sense of impatient anticipation , a rushing of the moment . seeking an answer to the emptiness , very good

[Ladysue]

I thought this was very good. Much enjoyed...

[deeps]

This is wonderful,
Enjoyable read!

[Wicahpi]

Kind of like walking in a day dream.
Nice write :)