Contrived

Written while writing

Twisting these unruly thoughts 
into something presentable 

like the knotty hair 
my mother used to battle 
each morning 

in desperation I write
aiming for wisdom
landing on forced

Reviews

[emipoemi]

The only "forced" you're landing on is with the last stanza....which adds some intriguing factor to the poem as a whole, for it calls for something more to come before the last stanza in order to ease into it, BUT the fact that you acknowledge the seeming forcedness of the poem, you turn it into a meta composition of genius. For that unsettling iffiness of an ending ends up becoming part of a poem and landing the poem itself on a good and interesting note. Well done!