Relatively Like Me.

Another Challenge - ATC

Excited to meet.

Is that the right word?

Nervous, anxious 

- Stare to the feet

, where it's safe.

Shock.

He looks just like me,

- But well dressed.

Well mannered probably

Not a mess not like me

Not a failure

Not a disgrace to the family.

,but we are family. 

"Hello." - He speaks

- Stare to the feet

,where it's safe. 

A grown man should be able to find words,

So many questions but speechless still

it's absurd, trapped within my own

insecurity, I can't offer him a drink

I don't have any money

"Would you like a coffee?" 

his smile is kind, just like mine.

I nod, I contacted him. 

How was he so confident?

My long lost twin,

Reunited not knowing a thing

about each other.

- We discover we don't need to speak.

we just sit and sip our latte's 

As if we come here every week.

I know we were cut from the same cloth,

Disguised in rags and silk,

The same blood

Regained lost brotherly love.

Author's Note

Challenge "Identical twins separated at birth, one brought up in poverty and the other in wealth finally meet as Adults."

- Did I succeed or fail?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

My father was a wanderer. He had five wives and 11 kids I know about. I met brothers and sisters I didn't know I had. Your story is true. Family is family. Blood create a bond never forgotten. The poem felt true. You did a excellent job with the poem.
Coyote

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you that's lovely to hear that this poem was able to touch you on a personal and positive level - ATC

[Coyote Poetry]

It did and you are welcome.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I felt that the essence of the souls was captured and I simply saw them as two
people. The visual of the description makes it more powerful. This could be a great
2-3 minute short film with the poem as narration.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

That's a great idea and I'm flattered I don't have the skills to do that though!

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Well done!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you Emily :)

[W R Stowe]

This is nice and they say twins sometimes have mental telepathy between them nice job

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you for the review :) Glad you liked it

[W R Stowe]

Your quite welcome

[Ryan Henderson]

Very good piece yet again! The flow is great and the poem seems to have a rhythm that keeps the reader reading!

I know we were cut from the same cloth,

Disguised in rags and silk,

The same blood

Regained lost brotherly love.

That's my favorite part. So full of meaning and sentimentality! Very nice piece. Keep it up!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you :):) I love these little writing challenges, you should give it a go!

[Frank]

I really enjoyed this, almost gave up in the beginning because of the punctuation, unorthodox to say the least. You developed it well and pulled us in deeper into the narrative and at the end we had a complete and interesting story.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Thank you, I like to play with punctuation sometimes really pleased you enjoyed it :)