When the Smoke Clears

Tonight before the world

Drowned in darkness

The last rays of the dying sun

Bid a fiery farewell

Scribbled across the sky

Written in colors I used to see

Dancing in your eyes

Now, those same colors

Are in the flames that

Feed hungrily on remnants of our love:

Memories, thoughts, feelings

Coded in Ls, Os, Vs and Es

On white paper

Now turning to black ash

No fire burns forever

But, when the smoke clears

And you dry your stinging eyes

The gentle glimmer of the stars above

Will light your way back home

Reviews

[Lorry]

Those flames do feed hingrily on the remnants, don't they?
There isn't much to colour and vibrancy amongst feeling this as darkness consumes us. Less living, more existing and the only positive to be found is that if it wasn't felt so acutely, this wouldn't be near as good a write as it is.
Makes me thinking how much we do suffer for our art.

[Laz K.]

True, true...
Thanks for the visit!

[Lacey Sue]

This is really good and just saying everyone has dark days and nights because many people have bad depression

[Laz K.]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment, Hazel. I've read some of your poems, and so I know that you can relate.

[Lacey Sue]

Yes, I can very much relate, but all you can do is focus on the present and look forward to your bright future because if you keep living in the past you won't get very far in life and won't be able to move forward. You'll always hold your past against yourself and to be honest I'm working on myself now because I have to get my life together and I think everyone has something in their lives they need to get together. That's like me I just got my job and am starting Thursday at well it was 4, but it's now 2 and I am only 16 and am getting emails from colleges which I'm slowly getting better just take it little by little and remember baby steps and leave your past behind.

[Laz K.]

Again, you're right. That's exactly what I know I have to do: "leave the past behind, and move on." It just seems so overwhelming. Thanks again, you are an angel!

[Dave Brown]

for whatever reason, I have not been reading your work lately and that is my loss, for although I am not really into the romantic thing, I think the writes you offer are extremely fine work and you deserve a much greater audience

[Laz K.]

Thank you, Dave! Your words of encouragement are very much appreciated!