rise low

in the name......

rise low

we want to start you out low
sinner for beginners
venial, later the big time, mortal sins
WHOA!
we want you to praise God which will keep you low
don’t stand up, keep kneeling,
get the idea.......low......low
god is on high..........whoa!
now listen to me sinners
confess, eat some christ, say your prayers
and go to bed.
remember when you rise.......rise low!

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

thanks margie!

i lived catholic school 8 years, altar boy, priest & nun abuse.

regards,
al

[barleygirl]

Whoa! This sounds like a spoof on those high-and-mighty folks perhaps? I kinda love your tongue-in-cheek explanation of how these things go. It’s all about staying low when the other guy goes high . . . or was that the other way around? I’m just kidding . . . I love it when someone has the gumption to make fun of the puffed-up & pious, in a perfectly gentle & subtle way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Alfred Kukitz]

thanks alan!

last line is getting out of bed. did you say your morning prayers?

regards,
al

[Alfred Kukitz]

thanks chris!

sometimes i think of catholic religion as a criminal institution!

regards,
al

[alanwgraham]

Great work Alfred. I thought your poem was very quirky and humorous. Yes, sin creeps up on you and you get accustomed to the little ones before moving on. If we're all sinners why not go with the flow? Personally I think god confuses us with sins that aren't really sins and then forgives us for them. As for the last line - what are you thinking about!
Cheers,
Alan

[Alfred Kukitz]

thanks sami!

i can’t tell you what an honor it was with pants down getting whacked just below the buttocks. a real nice sting!
oh the catholics and their appeal of young deviant sex.

regards,
al

[Alfred Kukitz]

thanks jacob!

i thought of you in a moment of penmanship! i couldn’t stop laughing!

regards,
al

[Chris Shaw]

I found this little poem amusing. Maybe I shouldn't have but I did. I don't expect the sinners found it amusing, it must have been painful for them on their knees so much. But I am left with the strong message that got through, that's religion for you.

Thank you

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

The message is loud and clear great poet and friend. Too much hypocrisy and control in all religions. One Should Practice And Be A Good Example. Keep sharing and tackling.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the nuns would have loved this...that humility thing carried so far we can never get off our damn knees.