Birth of Man

is it your birthday?

Birth of Man

I saw an inkling of soul

masterminding itself around God's known breath

As air became atmosphere

As earth began to chatter around orbit

Day turn to night

The insects buzzed

Ever so slowly man would be born

in the twilight of fire & ice forevermore!

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Thank You Kathy!

My dark mind can light the world!

regards,
al

[Alfred Kukitz]

Thanks Marge!

I'm doing a manuscript and plan on including it on paper. Whoa!

regards,
al

[Alfred Kukitz]

Thanks Sami!

I'm so sorry for this belated response. I'm drifting further away from one of my loves.

regards,
al

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Birth of Man'
Alfred Kukitz,
To be able to identify with the whole of life is a beautiful thing.
What is this unseen entity which drives all upon this globe?
You came up with some descriptive phrases:
'inkling of soul'
masterminding itself around God's known breath'
and this was very cool:
'As earth began to chatter around orbit'
and my favorite!
In the twilight of fire &Ice forevermore'
The last line brings up the rear of this long line of humanity
from day one, We work, cry, love, create, care- all wonderful.
Looking to God our source and the creator of all.
Blessings,
Kathy

[barleygirl]

Your powerful msg reminds me of the George Strait (country) song: "I saw God today" -- the first verse being about witnessing birth & feeling so much of what you describe here. Your poem seems to be a blend of universal birth vs individual birth . . . as if we can see the significance of all mankind in the miracle of one birth (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sami Khalil]

I love it. Deep with many connotations of wisdom. You are breathtaking.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Thanks J!

That was my favorite too!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my, this is good...especially the second line which i wish i had written myself.
j.