Unwanted

Like captured grass that wilts and fades, the colors being drained.

Like leafless trees, their branches dead and broken.

Like falling snow that doesn't stick, it melts away and is forgotten.

I am the changing weather, the sadness that you find.

I am the grass that loses its life.

I am a tree that's stripped of its leaves.

I am the snow with no place to go, the weather not allowing me to stay.

Like falling rain on a sunny day, a rain that doesn't cease.

Like a stirring storm, loud crashes and bright streaks.

I am the rain that doesn't leave.

I am the storm over the sea, sailors begging me to ease.

I am everything you don't want to see,

I am the storm,

The storm is me.

Author's Note

I don't usually write poetry like this, so I'd really appreciate your thoughts and suggestions. Thank you.

Reviews

[Jordan's Back]

I often times feel like this, Abashed, Abused, alone.. I have two spectrum's to myself, The hopeless romantic, and the Psychotic freak. This poem is written very well, Its expressionism is well beyond depth, it pierces the very core of the heart. This is definitely a favorite of mine, and I look forward to reading more from you!

[Kelsey]

Thank you, dear, I really appreciate it. x

[Jordan's Back]

no problem. It was genuinely my pleasure!

[Somebrownnerd]

Great job Kelsey. I really liked your style in this one, emotionally descriptive as usual, but with a great use of imagery. My favorite stanza:

"I am the changing weather, the sadness that you find.
I am the grass that loses its life.
I am a tree that's stripped of its leaves.
I am the snow with no place to go, the weather not allowing me to stay."

[Kelsey]

Thank you so much, it really means a lot.

[MachinaWriter]

I really like this one. Like a lot. There's some really evocative imagery in this one. The very first line had me hooked. "Like captured grass that wilts and fades, the colors being drained." That's such a great line.

I also really liked the flow of this line "I am the rain that doesn't leave / I am the storm over the sea, sailors begging me to ease". A really great write, it shows you have wonderful skill in conjuring up vivid images and powerful emotion at the same time. Good work.

[Kelsey]

Wow, that means so much, thank you. I really wasn't too sure about this one since it's a bit different from what I normally write, but I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I'll have to work more on things like this. I'd really love to improve on my visuals, so this was kind of a start for that. It means a lot that you think it was a good one. Thank you.