A noisy thought

Squeaky is the thought

that springs to mind rusty

nuts, bolts being wet.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Vividly presented images in this metaphoric senyru Andrew.
Could do with one more syllable in the second line?

[andrew mitchell]

lol how right you are!! I was checking your arithmetic John lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It's the thought that counts lol!

[andrew mitchell]

LOL hahahahahaha !!!!!!!

[alf]

Hi Andrew. You are gaining a place in haiku!!! Have you been taking lessons??? Hahaha!! alf

[andrew mitchell]

Hahaha How did you know!! lol No! no lessons lol

[alf]

Then extra points awarded!!!!!~

[marcus]

Damn squeaky beds........