Walking away!

Fiction!

Walking away

In the distance

She looks around

She laughs.

She carries on walking

Her head held high

Seeing my entrails

Scattered behind her

From heart strings snapped. 

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

Wow this is a strong piece
A totally man eaters that just takes and leaves with no care of the mess she left behind
Brilliant wrote PM

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Musketeer of the night! Did you know Aramis is a Men's perfume lol. You are everywhere!!! LMAO :):)

[sereenaoutloud]

LMAO no I did not .. :)

[andrew mitchell]

Hmmh! Not bad! I can smell you here! lol Not only words but now the senses you attract but don't get too carried away , you are not expensive lol but smells good all the same Aramis!! :)

[ANTO]

A femme fatale who knows exactly what they are doing and has no scruples when love lies bleeding.
I like this - i like the style, the imagery and the brevity - my kind of write my friend.
:)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you ANTO or shall I say MR. Idol!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another very tightly constructed and expressive piece full of pathos Andrew. Just one suggestion I would drop the 'heart' before entrails as you use heart again in the final line and you won't miss it in that seventh line.

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks for the thumbs up!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yup now very crisp!