tears that fall

fictional play

Heavy are the tears

That dangle

On heart strings, broken.

Below, the pool. collects.

Mirroring the reflection

Love, on heart cords pulled

Bleeding.

A heart now scarred

The river runs dry, tears.

Until the beats of one...... dies

No longer spoken.

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

This is sad AM the first stanza such great imagery!!
Beautiful!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yup has a Shakespearean feel to it indeed of loves labours lost in fact. Would make one minor change to eradicate the two tears (no pun intended), thus the first line might read 'Heavy are the sorrows'?

[andrew mitchell]

yes as always a thought to ponder maybe the 2nd line last stanza but I do love repetition for pushing the statement lol.