broken in two!

Playing with words in love being broken

                                                        Raped is the love

                                                            When used

                                                            Abandoned

                                                             Discarded

                                                              Abused

                                                  The heart violently shaken

                                                             Distraught

                                                               Disbelief

                                                                Broken

Reviews

[Gee]

Hi Andrew,hope you are well.Enjoyed this.Never mind the poetry,are you watching the Ashes...very evenly balanced,one thing though,Warner looks like a 70's porn star with that 'tache

[andrew mitchell]

You guys really doctor the pitch lol like Botham said "Make a game out of it" That pitch was green then mowed so short lol. Yes we are in trouble already cos aussies can never play for a draw . We lose everytime and why did we drop Root! I was rooted watching him play! lol Warner has lost his edge of late and the moe is bad!

[Gee]

Gotta make home advantage play if pods'ask the Indian groundsmen!!!Haddin is older than me,he's wet himself twice and has to be reminded why he is in Britain!!!Cmon Joey boy...lol

[Gee]

If pods.....what is that???

[andrew mitchell]

lol Very hard to beat you guys on a dead wicket lol like never!

[Gee]

That will do me Andrew,that will do me nicely,take care I'm off to work

[andrew mitchell]

We will talk about Lords when I start cooking for you guys hahaha A nice hot than hot vindaloo! Hey If I was on the field I would bring some scissors and snip Ali lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the short repetitive lines work like bullets piercing the skin of our emotions.

nicely done.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for your kind words Jacob

[E G TEN]

Hello Sir Mitch, I counted about 16 words in here,
but somehow the impact of this poem seems
Like a 16 line versed,,, you always have your
Way of exploiting your words to have a positive
Impact To your writings... very cool men! :-)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for the compliments EGTEN

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think dear Andrew you must go eat then abed dear fellow as you 'reign' so many poems upon us full of angst and hurt then humour lol. This captures the essence of heartbreak using words we can all relate to.

[andrew mitchell]

Lol Did You know alf is on another site allpoetry . He has 490 poems already and 95 followers. I'm disappointed he left us without a goodbye!