She said! I said!

She's lying on the bed, exposed

An invitation was read

A decision was made

I wasn't going to oppose.

I said " Two sugars or one!"

I ducked.

A pillow was thrown.

I said" Better luck next time!"

She said" Come here! You're dead!"

So I did.

I said" That tickles!"

She said" Better than the language of pain."

I said" Hmmh! Don't know that one!"

She then let her fingers do the talking.

I said "Ouch!" "That hurts!"

She smiled.

I accepted her proposal!

Reviews

[θεά]

That is quite kinky Andrew! And it has this free flowing easy meter. Quite a breezy read.

[andrew mitchell]

thank you maliika

[Neytri]

Definitely the last line's my favorite. While reading the poem, a kind of curiosity is aroused in the reader's mind, whether that proposal would be accepted or not, but ya, as someone already said, who could refuse such a proposal? ;)

[....................]

This is the 52nd shade of grey, my friend... your creative 'foreplay' writes are so entertaining... and who could refuse such a proposal?

[andrew mitchell]

thank you dear poet

[Kelly Scheppers]

These little vignettes you do are most intriguing, Andrew! ...just as long as she hurts so good!

[andrew mitchell]

thank you Kelly lol

[sereenaoutloud]

Cant help but smile when reading this cheeky playful write!
Love it TTM :)

[andrew mitchell]

Smile away SOL LL!!

[marcus]

Hey! What's going on here?

[andrew mitchell]

a play of words fingernails cut!

[KWP]

that's a new kinda foreplay right there .... must give it a go .... how can one not have a cheeky smile wen reading this?

[andrew mitchell]

lol Thank you KWP

[jacob erin-cilberto]

did you mean, "I excepted" or "I accepted" in last line...

not sure...although "excepted" would be an interesting play on words.

i liked the tongue in cheek humor in this...the subtle sensuality of the situation.
sort of like Robert Creeley with the dialogue...he did that very well...

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks J it was an overlook "accepted" lol, and I must look up Robert Creeley

[andrew mitchell]

Hi J. looked up Robert Creeley's works. Very nice My kind of poetry! Thank you J.

[Coyote Poetry]

A delightful tale shared in the poem. I liked the conversation and the final lines. Accepting the situation. Thank you for sharing the entertaining poetry.
Coyote

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you CP for reviewing and enjoying the tale:)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You have an interesting way of packaging an idea into little cameos and letting them spill like milk down the page Andrew. Delightful.

[andrew mitchell]

lol thank you John lol