Blackened

Blackened is the love

In the fireplace, ashes

Of a letter once written

Now discarded, the love 

Mourning, burning thoughts

In smoke, rising scattered

Disappearing, chimney in view

A love finally lost, dead

In wisps, grey dust

Smoking.

Reviews

[B]

I am standing there putting that fire out
No love should burn
always preserved

Powerful image here :)

[Indra Neil]

profound imagery in this wonderful brevity! well done!!

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks so much Indra

[Indra Neil]

u r most welcome!

[Gee]

ASHES,don't mention ashes !!!How are you mate,where had everybody gone,offline???Oh,enjoyed the write

[andrew mitchell]

Hi Gee I've been sick with the flu, and s**t from work hasn't helped either. I was surprised how you guys collapsed which would of been us I think if we didn't win the toss!! Also tour lineup was better with Haddin and the other loser Watson out lol

[Gee]

Hope ur feeling better now,where's Anto skipped off to,any idea???Yep you looked better and Mitch was firing(b*****d!!)lol

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks Gee I don't know where anto is ! alf is at allpoetry I went under an alias reviewing his works as I did here hoping he would click its me but so far he thinks I'm another kiwi lol. I will tell him its me oneday! lol

[andrew mitchell]

management has got me down at present so I'm light on the writes!

[Gee]

F**k 'em....feel free to pop over and av a browse

[andrew mitchell]

lol will do

[marcus]

the blackened embers, of a burnt out love. Embodied in a letter!

[andrew mitchell]

Or just letting go to accept the new! Ta marcus

[wordman]

love,it is a strange feeling with many emotions
more songs about lost love than anything else
it can heal you or it can kill you

[andrew mitchell]

Yes! or its out with the old and in with the new! A sort of letting go! A pagan sacifice lol Thank you Wordman as always:)

[Valentine]

Sadly it is not that easy. Nice idea for a write none the less. Valentine

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Kathie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like Beccy said..."we can burn the letter"---but yes, "that memory is permanently imprinted within the soul of our heart.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you J

[Beccy]

We can burn a letter, but memories are forever and indelibly printed in the heart and mind.

Beccy.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you beccy I suppose it varies slightly if a new love is replacing what was once a love but not as great as to the now

[....................]

a sad image you have given us, Andrew... instead of love burning in the heart it vanishes in smoke beyond the hearth...I guess it's the only way to make sure it's over...nicely-penned, my friend

[andrew mitchell]

thank you ft i'm into twisted dark tales lol whether the heart or something lol

[....................]

I like them, too, Andrew :)