It was I!

Who was that 

That kissed the 

Heart so tender

Leaving drops of

My nectar, honey

From footprints, soft?

What was that

That caressed

The senses, a buzzing

Hungry for more,

Awakened?

Who was that 

That touched a heart

Now craving more,

Addicted?

Who was that 

That pieced my heart

Now not moving,

So deep?

Who was that 

Who stole my heart

No ransom, empty

Bleeding. Left?

Who tickled my fancy

Right under my nose

In broad day light, so sunny?

"It was I....

For brazen am I

When you are....

Undressed. open."

"So why did you leave me

For another and another?

Was I not good enough?"

"The same reason

You will take many a lover

Undressed, open.

I just got there first."

Said the bee to the flower.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this tale. Twist of words led to surprising ending. I like the poetry that keep the reader attention and make them smile at the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for all your kind reviews my friend

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure and you are welcome.

[R Smith]

lovely stuff Andrew, an ending of delight and surprise my friend :)

[andrew mitchell]

haha Thanks Richard for your kind words

[terry smith]

Bees love purple...nice one Andrew kept me guessing till the end!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Terry

[Leif]

This was very entertaining and beautifully worded. I couldn't ask for more as a reader. Nicely done.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for your kind words Leif

[Einstein Noodle]

"I just got there first." :) how can one be sure? in a field of flowers with so many looking for honey! when all is said and done it all works in concert eh!? ... what a fine tale ... interesting twist says i to the brazen fellow ... 'tis I!
i can not shake the image of a lusty field with hundreds of flowers and buzzing activity ... we do live in a marvelous world don't we!?
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for your great review E

[Alfred Kukitz]

Grand narrative on a small scale. Love this story and the way it's told.


Regards,
Al

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for your kind words Al

[Indra Neil]

brilliantly composed write! the twist in the ending is a highlight!

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for your kind review Indra

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome! :)

[B]

Very witty

Not every flower allows any bee to stick to its nectar
Some just are cautious enough to stay true
and wait for a bee that buzzes only in one flower

not like ten million lol

[andrew mitchell]

lol Thanks for your kind words

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the twist at the end...she pierced his heart and bled questions as to why.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Jacob

[....................]

a clever write whose outcome can be predicted if one follows the drops of honey and buzzing sound :)... neatly done, Andrew!

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks FT lol you know me too well I think!!!

[....................]

you are welcome, my friend, but I think you have much more up those sleeves of yours to keep me guessing yet :D

[andrew mitchell]

lol........................lol