That quick withdrawal

That quick withdrawal.

Her thought travelled,

the knife she stabbed.

I bleeding,

my love died quickly

on her withdrawal.

Reviews

[V]

I do have the impression it reads quite ambiguous. I like the words you used in this one.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Mimi And I now see what you mean lol not intentional!!! :)

[V]

Lol. Oh my mind is so messed up sometimes...

[andrew mitchell]

You are fine you give smiles and laughs Mimi

[V]

Yeah...*face buried in hands*

[alifeacoustic]

Yes, those withdrawals sting quite a bit, don't they? And o matter how you y, you never see it coming.
Nicely done Andrew.

[andrew mitchell]

Rather unexpectedly and often hurriedly one thinks. Thank you Lorry

[Anonymous]

The aches of love lost never quite leave you...

The stabbing knife was sure to leave a scar. Scars make us tougher, although a little harder to love.

Enjoyed the read! Keep writing, poet :)

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Anonymous for your words.:)

[Mary Helda]

Very poignant...i do not know if i am right but i translated this in the context of a jiltef lover...a man who was left by his lover whom he loved in and out of bed

[andrew mitchell]

How right you are! Thank you Mary