Mr Sunburn!

Some Summer Monday Madness!!!

Mr Sunburn!

Ah! Mr Sunburn,

please take your

place upon thy skin

as I worship your sun.

On the heat exchange

tears dried

as emotions peeled

on sunburn's scorn.

Shimmering lights

on waters pale

massages the mirage

as I bake on a towel.

Thirty minutes each side,

I turn, I find.......

I'm still tender inside.

Incoherent thoughts lie

on poolside edge

as barbecue burns;

while smoky flavours land

on salty skin.

Hunger rises, snags are done 

as I down my thoughts

in pale ale floods.

Then I see her......

Two piece...... No!..... None!

All love took.....

was a splash 

united as one

with poolside manner.

Of course!

What goes on, underwater

stays underwater!    Captain Nemo.

 

 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i sorely recall my encounters with the sun ..always unintentional (not a sun worshiper) I am red headed (rather was red headed) and freckled .. always got burned by lingering too long ... is snag a slang expression? or do you mean snacks? i like the slow movement to the internal and am left wondering if the speaker is dreaming entirely, having fond memories ...or is she actually enters the stage .. doesn
t really matter tho does it? ... she's as real as real in the head or out .. how we do see things the way we want eh!?
E.
ps. yesterday morning (early) i let the dog out and our deck thermometer said -24 F. ..remembering my burns from ol' Sol actually is very good pain!! ;) thanks!

[andrew mitchell]

Hi E when I was a kid after the pool you laid on a towel in the sun just to dry off and get warm. A snag is slang for sausage. I tried to create an incoherent mixed dreamscape while lying in the sun thinking of the food cooking, me drying, drifting off and of course naughty thoughts on the lady. lol

[zunie frost]

i love it !!!! really beautiful write !! i have a sweet ans soft touch of emotions

All love took.....
was a splash
united as one
with poolside manner.
Of course!
i love this stanza !!! thanks for sending me request !!!
keep it up
1000 % ratings as always

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you zunie my friend :)

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!

[softlyfall]

Silly goose. I bet you are a lot of fun Andrew

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you softlyfall and I would be alotta fun if I had a pool!! So many ideas to play with lol :);)