I saw an opening

I saw an opening

Dropping her protection

there was a raise

in crowd connecting,

prominent.

Knocking on her door;

"Pick me!"

" Let me in!"

They chanted.

"I love you!"

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

she sways, crowds part; and men fall lapping at her feet ;) makes me think the the magnificent, haunting Marilyn Monroe.

lucky one that crosses the threshold ... but maybe not!!! :}
E.
ps i like this one ... you have made it personal with the title .. painted vivd images for me ..and i like the simplicity.

[andrew mitchell]

As always EN Thank You.

[V]

A visual one. Though I don't know yet what to gain from it. The structure is nice as the words are expressive, appellative. It reads simple with a good flow, but maybe there's more in between the lines.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for your words Vanessaandcat