Stuck in ice!

Stuck in ice!

As thoughts slipped

on my Tundra plains

of timelessness:

frozen, floating, fixed.

My mistake re-occurring

at hand, had me

permafrost

finding the solution.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Interesting mix of images to somehow conjure a treacherous picture of slippery frustration. Well done.

[andrew mitchell]

I was trying to depict mistakes that are frozen in the mind remain until they melt, the pun being I found the solution. Its a non sexual poem lol

[David Scott]

Odd to get stuck somewhere so slippery...
Hard to get traction.

[andrew mitchell]

Funny fact David when your fingers are left in the bath or any water for that matter they wrinkle up so you can have that extra traction.! Thanks for dropping by.

[David Scott]

Now that is funny... I had not thought of things in that way. Ha.

[Einstein Noodle]

hooked by the title ... tongue on frosted pole stuck instantly in me minds eye :) i think this could be more powerful with small changes .. like make it personal in both verses or universal .. and get rid of starting a line with The ... i think your idea is fine wisdom ... we get stuck ..oh yes we do ..in a myriad of ways ... but what is the insanity ..mmmmm repeating the same mistake over and over ... or ... stuck in a mire of one stage or other of grief, guilt, or whatever!! :) love this poem .. i may be in a deeper mood than called for ..but i yam what i yam! ;}
E.

[andrew mitchell]

Hi E ,the original version was personal I only changed it cos of too many "my's" or "Me's". Thanks for your insight and review!

[Willard Wells]

And after 8 plus years in Alaska, I know all of the elements in this work. Terrible way to be stuck.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you Willard. What did you do in Alaska?

[Willard Wells]

Sales, managed, flew, hiked, fished, cross country skiing, scuba diving. Lived life to the fullest.

[andrew mitchell]

sounds great willard

[Willard Wells]

Couple of stories in there and I keep working on them.

[Relic]

Some problems last forever. You can't break them or melt them away. You just slip and slip until something gives. Nice job andrew.

[andrew mitchell]

Too right Tim, mistakes can last a lifetime lol Thanks for your words Tim.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

damn those locks freeze, and then the keys break in them...can't twist ourselves back open again.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you for your words J :)

[Sami Khalil]

Icy problems require worm attention and or wearing heavy clothing. Lol
Wonderful....:)))))

[andrew mitchell]

Thank you dear poet friend.:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome generously....:)))))