Room 373

Room 373.

The elevator opens

lust, the third floor,

room 373 awaits

ready, for action.

Perfume, laughter echoes

down corridors lit,

fumbling keys rattle nervously, 

a door handle creaks.

Giggling on entry

two women, a man

stagger on cocktails;

consumed twilight bliss.

Stories hang on

wall paint peeling,

Giggles on whispers 

blushing meet.

Words tumble on high heels flat,

lips swirl on carousel mouths.

Inhibitions undressed,

clothing on the floor

laced, like autumn leaves....... fall.

Anticipation opens....

behind closed doors,

hips sway, no bedroom manners

You know the score!

Who said........ three's a crowd!

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

quite an engaging, intriguingly cheeky write, Sir.

the first stanza [most likely due to my fascination with the paranormal];
gave me an impression of "the elevator ritual"...

I adore the enriched imagery you've incorporated into this ink...
I felt like I was watching a movie screening...a lovely romantic
interlude

also the pleasant pauses, great meter. Thank you for sharing (:

~ x - barrie

[andrew mitchell]

haha I know I thought of the Shining when writing down the word elevator almost wanted to duplicate the story and make it a ghostly apparition of a write..Thanks miss barrie and the Hotel Manager hopes you enjoy your stay room 372!!!;) lol

[ms. barrie]

wow, i completely forgot about the shining, i have not watched that movie in ages...
i've been obsessed with Japanese horror flicks as of late
how clever of you! can i check out anytime? need to get back to neptune

[andrew mitchell]

lol................................World movies channel had some beauties on japanese horror films a few years ago now!

[ms. barrie]

i'm watching the unseeing on and off and the ju-jon II but i will have to check that out
thank you :)

[andrew mitchell]

I can't remember the titles off hand but I will try and google for them.

[ms. barrie]

awh thank you, how sweet, take your time. i'm in no rush :)

[David Scott]

Well now... Seems like someone has a favorite room to visit.
Sexy and playful.
I think this is typical of sexual topics. We wonder. We all enjoy mental voyerism from time to time.

Well done here.

[andrew mitchell]

Thanks David I'm still waiting but if I was a Rock Star WELLLLLLL! lol Let the games begin lol sadly nothing!

[David Scott]

Ha. I was thinking " Hotel California". Some situation look better than they would turn out.

[andrew mitchell]

I can never find that Hotel " you can never leave!" in holiday brochures! Beats working if there is one! lol

[V]

The pattern, the tone reads nice. Really drew me in. Erotic topic but veiled into nice words. And of course (as so often) the slightly ironic last line.

[DIVYA]

A great potrayal of a particular setting, a situation. I loved the imagery of clothes falling to the floor laced like autumn leaves. Beautiful.

[andrew mitchell]

You are too kind thank you!

[DIVYA]

You are welcome!