adieu

it has got a vivid variety of layers

An old recluse had,
by the lakeside grown.
Sevenscores and a two took,
haven in his white tresses.
Of reek scent, had tenuity in form,
absurd face and tepid of skin,
rusty to talk, yet chivarlous walk.
With an ochre hat, on head apt.
Reticent he stood, in sylvan wood.
A snitch he was, of nature across,
the lake that lead, many more to dead
---amar laksh

Reviews

[DrD]

I enjoyed this but was also concerned about the word "snitch." Snitch is a modismo, coming out of prison jargon and I think it is out of place in the eloquence of all the words around it. I don't know how it could be replaced without reforming the entire line. Nonetheless, again I enjoyed the concept and the detail was excellent. I will visit you again soon.

[amarlaksh]

thank you sir.

[emmy bon]

nice piece man...

[Emberlorna]

This is very good. I love the dark dramatic ending :}

[The Fallen]

Very nice write :) Very descriptive

[Dr. Wood ?]

it is layered alright...Piled high and full of realism....Snitch is a common word in England meaning a grass....an informer.....But you already know this

[amarlaksh]

extremely grateful (and relieved! ) that you reviewed it sir.

[Jo March]

very descriptive, lovely poem

[Ina Waltz]

I enjoy this one, especially few first lines. In the last line I would use 'deed' instead of 'dead', it would give a nicer flow to it. Just a friendly suggestion.
Otherwise, I'm a big fan of this poem!

[amarlaksh]

although i liked your review but my brain is failing to comprehend for the suggestion of 'deed' could you please express your thought

[Ina Waltz]

http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/deed
maybe this link will help you
a snitch can be related with evil deeds (as he is planning something vicious for the future)

[amarlaksh]

well i know but i am expressing in the poem that , he is a snitch, an informer of the nature(the life) that eventually becomes dead

[Ina Waltz]

oh... then it's a different story :) arrangement confused me a bit. Sorry! :)

[amarlaksh]

thats ok :)