Through....

Its my first love poem, quite short :)

Through the yard, in autumn quiet  

Hand in hand, and love in sight,

Among crisp leaves, with tepid hearts

Soul shared in two parts

Parch lips, for another pair

Thirst deep, and minds bare…

                                                    --- Amar laksh

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

Classy

[David Scott]

Yes! This is poetry!
You did not over explain it.
You condensed the crystalized emotion with your choice of words.
Youndid not try to convince me or tell me what you interpreted the world to mean. This poem was pure exposure of a feeling!
One of your best.

[amarlaksh]

love to see u like it David!

[Annabelle Lee]

beautiful!

[InsanityWriter]

Oooh! I love how you started... And then it got even better! (; Great job, I enjoyed!!

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Simply complicated. It was an interesting read. I think you could try to go into detail with it a little bit more, but you don't have to, Either way, it was very....capturing.

~Fuzzy

[quinfinn]

wonderfully worded and superbly written

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Amar I liked it apart from the last line as minds bare sounded cold and empty and far from loving.

[amarlaksh]

appreciate it John!

[amarlaksh]

:)

[Dr. Wood ?]

quite a lovely poem well done

[amarlaksh]

thanks doc

[Salar Majak]

amazingly beautiful, i love how this flows, and the emotion is so intence i can feel it, all of it!, good job!

[amarlaksh]

Thanks Sal for ur review :)