For u...

As i glanced upon thy form,
Nor do i see those silken tresses,
Neither the skin of pearls  borne,
Even not the perfect smile that embraces..
The only thing i ever see in you..
Is the halo that surrounds,
The lightest of the hue...
your heart, the heart of endless bounds

               ------ Amar laksh

Reviews

[Monster ^.^]

Substance over form... such true love! There is no problem with the message, but I have noticed this slight thing I want to notify you about... The Line: "Nor do i see those silken tresses" You shouldn't have Nor yet, since NOR is agreeing to something that was previously negated... but then, nothing is negative... perhaps you should exchange the 2nd and 3rd lines...

Neither the skin of pearls borne,
Nor those silken tresses do i see,

it sounds better... but that's my opinion :)

[Fuzzy_Poluzah]

Short, but I feel there's a story behind this. ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT!

~ Fuzzy

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Honest and true.
~pat

[Ambereen]

I loved this one ... Nice job ....

[dunnia]

very nice

[de_maruf]

good

[quinfinn]

beautifully done...guaranteed to make her smile, perhaps even more.

[David Scott]

A poem from the smitten heart.
Well done.

[Annabelle Lee]

Beauty is only skin deep. Nice job

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very romantic and precice poem Amar

[Salar Majak]

wow! this is really deep! and beautiful!, the heart of endless bound :) beautiful!