Shadows of the Past

A mistake made in life is not always bad!

These little shadows

Are a part of me

Some  mistakes I made I agree

But life is a lesson that I learn

Only when my fingers I burn

 

So when shadows of the past

That is gloomy and dark haunt

I move into the light

Where the future dawns

Author's Note

Its a bit abrupt I guess . However it is my belief to let bygones be bygones and look at the future

Reviews

[ganga ramesh]

i guess all have those gloomy, dark, haunting shadows of their past life...agreed:)

[vspjaguar]

the idea is good, I feel that you can elaborate on this idea and write a very detailed poem. Perhaps you can write another version of this in the future :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem and artwork. The poem told the truth. There is darkness and mistakes. We move into the light and tried to do better. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Margarette]

I totally agree with you. We tend to make mistakes because nobody's perfect, even those with obsessive-compulsive disorders . It has always been natural to make mistakes the first time and make it a step towards improvement. You have written a self realization piece beautifully constructed to capture the reader's attention. Thank you for sharing!

[Frieda P]

I don't think it's abrupt at all, it says what it needs to say in those words...anymore might have been overkill. Fantastic job, I really like this one!

[Night]

...I love this poem...it's short and sweet and well written....Nice...:)

[David Scott]

Is it only the past that gives us a shadow? I wonder about this... Might it depend on the sorce of light that reveals the shadow as well? This idea could be expanded I think. A nice mental joust to open things up.

[amarlaksh]

Good work Amber!!

[Time's The Bond]

It's not bad I liked it though your words seem to be covering the top they go no deeper, unless you think about it.

[Christoph Poe]

Interesting poem. Attempt to go DEEPER into what you have here. Describe the "darkness" to us. Show us what it's like to have many shadows fallow us around.

These thoughts can easily be enhanced, and magnified. It's entirely up to you to pull in desperation at your readers.

The picture helps, but have your words stand out from this illustration. Have them be two completely different things, yet the same thing, simultaneously.

Just my suggestions. Hope this helps!

--Christoph Poe

[Ambereen]

yes Christoph was looking for suggestions. I knew it was pretty abrupt .thank u