Barely Whole

 

I lie, and cheat, and play on hearts:

Broken, and filed, boiled to slight perfection.

The penny left about the floor, shaken and faded;

Looks of defeat, lurid, painful stares,

Just barely human, just barely whole.

 

Reviews

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You actually describe half of human population. True humans were never on live ...

[Zane Mathias]

Great Write Love the ending very stronge- powerful.
Looks of deafeat, lurid, painful stares,

Just barely human, just barely whole.

keep up the Great work!!1 :)

[Emily B]

Great images, evokes a detached feeling of broken spirit. I sent it to a friend. :-D

[Brette Medb]

Hmmm tarnished is the word that comes to mind upon reading this and I think it was induced by the line about the penny left on the floor. For a one stanza poem it had a lot in it including imagery and emotion and depth. There's something about the scars and blemishes on the soul that make us who we are whether we like who we've become or not, there is always that chance to polish it and make everything right. Great write.


Brette