NIght

Dreams are like falling stars,
They burn so bright.
you try
To reach new heights-
Soon they fall:
Their light burns out:
Broken, like a promise.

Author's Note

Inspired by a line in a song ("You call me up again, just to break me like a promise"-Taylor Swift)

Reviews

[haley]

Awesome job! It starts out rhyming a lot, but then it tends to turn toward lyrical, poetic-like thoughts. I love it! It's like it took a turn towards the seriousness of what you were really trying to bring out!

[EdgarLovecraft]

Short and to the point and well constructed

[Edward]

This is so very true.. It seems like nothing can crush our dreams at some points.. Like people making promises they can't keep. It is also amazing when inspiration hits you. I mean it hits me like a brick.. Anyway this is a great write :3 keep it up!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

So true...dreams are like falling stars. They blaze through our brains and minds, and then upon waking they slowly fizzle out until only a memory remains; fuzzy at best. This was well done, I quite liked it. The last line was great, "broken, like a promise" --so many emotions in so few words.

[Brian]

A lot of times when people say something was inspired by something or someone else, they basically steal it but you really made it your own! It may have been inspired by that lyric but these are obviously your thoughts and not Taylor Swift's. I also love the tone of this poem. It's very gripping, dark, and angsty. Great job! One of my favorites!